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I walk along this four pronged prison
Encased behind walls of transparent steel
A soundless prism erected
Where the cries of silent tears are never heard
And the wounds of the past never heal
Anger rising
Like the tempest of a storm
An angel dying
Plunged into the darkness in which I was born
Boundless miles that stretch beyond the eye
A road and map lay dark and stained
Like the vile words of your feigned lies
Blame no target, for it could only stay in place
Judge the archer, whose arrow laid claim and waste
Broken promises and shallow goodbyes
Form a noose around our necks
That lifts us into the sky
Despite the name, this has nothing to do with the song by My Chemical Romance. XD

Enjoy! :3
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VioletDeathblood Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
AWESOME!!!
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TheElegantShadow Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! =D
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Grumpol Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome poem, very vivid! 
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TheElegantShadow Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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Grumpol Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :D
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angelenroute Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2014  Professional Writer
I LOVE this!!! Wow, brilliant poem.  I think your last line could be "That lifts us to the skies" or "That lifts us to the sky" for a hair better rhythm, if you wanted it.  Really powerful piece.  Great job! :D ~sean
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TheElegantShadow Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hmm... Honestly, that last line I'm still considering on whether I should change it or not. On one hand, there's not much wrong with how it is, but then again, anything that can be made better.

Hmm... I'll have to think about changing it to one of the suggestions you gave.

I'm happy that you enjoyed it! =D
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angelenroute Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2014  Professional Writer
Don't mind me, I forget to shut my mouth sometimes. :)
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TheElegantShadow Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I very much appreciate the input. Never be afraid to give suggestions or criticism, my friend. :3  
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